At times, I dabble in poetry. I did not want to post any of it at first because I am my worst critic. I always read my poetry and deem it too lame to share. I gathered some courage today to post one that I've grown to love.
Guilt
My soul is weary
My body is worn down
I keep beating myself
For my past sins
I long to be free
Without any memory
So I can stop
Living in fantasy
18 comments:
It speaks volumes....I really like it!!!!!!
Have a great week!!!!!
Ellie
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Says so much in so few words. I hope you'll post some more of your poetry. I like this one very much. *Barb* http://journals.aol.com/barbpinion/HEYLETSTALK
THat is beautiful...We are our own worse critics...looking for the perfection in the words...when most of the time...they are already there...
Jodi
That was fantabulous! And trust me, I am an expert on fantabulousness. Please post more poetry, I'd love to read them :)
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Nicely done! Short, poignant, and powerful. It says a lot, and I like it. ("The Scream" adds another layer to your poem. I like that the story behind the art complements the meaning of your words.) Please give us another, won't you?
Best,
Judith
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Hey, Great Work!! You`re goin` to have to give us more now!!
V
Hey that is wonderful. I see aol alerts on ly works on some journals and your is one its not alerting me SO thanks for leaving you link.
Hey that is wonderful. I see aol alerts on ly works on some journals and your is one its not alerting me SO thanks for leaving you link.
I know what you mean. I too am my own worst critic. Nice poem, I look forward to reading more!
Mary
Oh, I like this! It speaks to me and I can relate to your words. The picture you chose to accompany your poem is excellent. Susan
beautiful. judi
this was very pretty........i beat myself up all the time for my past mistakes..our memories can be blessings or sometimes they can almost destroy us. it's a strange thing. this was a lovely entry. http://journals.aol.com/dreamynetta/Underneathitall
very good poem. glad you found the courage to share it with us, thank you! :-)
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Hey, that's pretty good! A lot better than anything I could possibly write. I've written one good poem in my lifetime. And I'm not sure where the only copy I have of it is...it's about a garden. Yep Yep...
-Haley
Lame this is NOT. Don't second guess what comes from your heart and soul. If it made it onto the screen with feeling, than it has purpose. Sharing it with J-land may fulfill that purpose.
Tammy
I love this. I write poetry also, but am very reluctant to post it in my journal because it's such a personal thing for me and it would feel like I was leaving my heart open and I'm not really willing to do that right now.
Dee,
This is wonderful. It reaches in and touches the soul who feels the very thing. Words that connect should be shared and I hope you share more.
Rebecca
Guilt
How very apt is this poem. I am going through a Guilt time about my Daughter. Not because I harmed her in any way,but because I wanted her to stay a little girl. She is not speaking to me at the moment,in fact it has been a year and a half now.She has told me that she needs her own space. I respect her wishes,but it is hard!
Love Andrea
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